Class 3 Small Group Critique Notes
this is a very commanding theme
Bethany: i don't have to make it related to Russian / East European art, even though the term may have been generated from there; it may create a different narrative and seem confusing— focus on my story
spell check!
Big type spread
maybe don't reply on the russian/east european art anymore, use the dreamscape images
Interview spreads
image: use image from my real home (Nanjing)
second interview spread content can start sooner, maybe still on a larger size, can interweave/flow across the spreads
Non-linear storytelling idea
the non-linear storytelling can be small / textual / visual, instead of being structurally and disrupting the flow
Maybe the questions on the cover can be the element of non-linear storytelling: if you answer yes to scenario 1, jump to page 10 etc.
Back cover
Bethany feels like the back cover doesn't sum it up
Hard to get the pepper idea/connection —> pepper is old, therefore pepper gone!
Cover
The size of the type on cover is competing with the second spread with big type
Maybe start with the same text size as the second interview spread (the one with Nanjing)
The teeth spread
It feels like a different taste, lose it, make space for others
Annotations
Text size may be too small
Get the habit of printing thumbnails to feel the flow of spreads.
Print out on 11x17 paper, 3x3 thumbnails or horizontal, print as spreads